Does my writing have feeling? Atmosphere? Anything!? I need feedback!?

I’ve never written anything “scary” before, so this is just a learning exercise. Obviously, suspense stories are measured by the feelings they evoke, and I’m curious to see if this evokes any amount of fear or suspense or anything. I’ve posted the first part of it here, and if you’re still interested, follow the link [...]

i’m writing a novel. i need some feedbacks?

here’s a preview..
Preface:
I’m doing my best to run; trying to make my feet move. Don’t stop! You need to keep running! I told myself. But my feet are starting to feel heavy, my hands trembling of the unknown danger and my head suffering from great pain.
My body is starting to get tired of all the [...]

can someone review this short story for our school writing contest? im new to this…?

I recall vaguely, that wondrous yet horribly terrifying feeling of flying. It was the last thing I saw before all that was visible, was total darkness “So this was what death felt like” I thought as the world around me crumbled, the darkness slowly consumed me. Suddenly, I look down, were those my fingers [...]

Can someone review this story I made for a writing competition? (topic is on hiroshima bombing)?

I remember that wondrous yet horribly terrifying feeling of flying. It was the last thing I saw before all that was visible, was total darkness “So this was what death felt like” I thought as the world around me crumbled . Suddenly, I look down, were those my fingers I saw sticking out from [...]